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David's avatar

Learned words enough to count on two hands with this one! While at least "lunting" seems misused, mention of Satan/pagan/more modern devices here and there disorients, and descriptions sometimes reiterate more than add, I enjoy your overall command of your vocabulary as well as your taste for it. Funnily enough, I just resumed reading Harry Harrison's West of Eden epics, and there's something so inviting about the carefully crafted expansiveness the author gives his sentences and paragraphs, to characters and their experiences, that I don't remember why and can't fathom how I left my bookmark where it was. This story quite resembles it in texture. Is coincidence to blame?

At the sight of the scavenging didels, I expected Rilk to find solace in thinking he would carry into the future by fueling the calamity's survivors and their descendants, but we didn't quite go there. I'm glad he spends his final moments with some measure of hope even so...

Good work!

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That was beautiful! I almost cried. :(

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